Tuesday, November 17, 2009

Symphony

There's a song between breaths
Lyrics, subtle
from respiratory winds
heard only with dying thoughts
and remembered with fading dreams
Truth escaped your breath
Words, false
from lying winds
believed only with loving hearts
and held with longing embrace
An orchestra tires of the song
and the less I've said, the less I'm wrong

16 comments:

Wings said...

I love the last line.

Brian Miller said...

sounds like you need a new maestro...

agree, the last line rings a true note...

e said...

That last line got me as well...

Ravyn said...

People should learn from that last line.

PattiKen said...

I'll make it unanimous.

anthonynorth said...

I agree, an excellent last line.

C Hummel Kornell a/k/a C Hummel Wilson said...

Strong writing, although it saddens me that innocence is taken and then destroyed. Well done!

Jingle said...

the less said, the less I'm wrong...

wow.
love the sentiment and how you deliver it.

love love your take. :)

Kristen Haskell said...

Oh how this resinates the feelings I have around my mother's recent passing.

lightverse said...

Nice! And I agree with the others as well as you on the last line, too.

Tess Kincaid said...

That is a brilliant last line. Really beautiful.

Sioux Roslawski said...

"...respiratory winds." Great image.

ZephyrInk said...

I really liked the “heard only with dying thoughts // and remembered with fading dreams” -- very well write poem. I'd applaud you, but the internet is in the way.

Helen said...

You combined simplicity with elegance and wrote a beautiful piece ...... 'the less I've said, the less I'm wrong' is profound.

Reflections said...

Powerful parting lines, combining the complex simplicity of words left to be remembered... You will be greatly missed.

Jinksy said...

An orchestra tires of the song
and the less I've said, the less I'm wrong

Way to go!

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