Tuesday, November 17, 2009

Symphony

There's a song between breaths
Lyrics, subtle
from respiratory winds
heard only with dying thoughts
and remembered with fading dreams
Truth escaped your breath
Words, false
from lying winds
believed only with loving hearts
and held with longing embrace
An orchestra tires of the song
and the less I've said, the less I'm wrong

16 comments:

  1. WingsNovember 17, 2009 at 8:48 AM

    I love the last line.

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  2. Brian MillerNovember 17, 2009 at 9:28 AM

    sounds like you need a new maestro...

    agree, the last line rings a true note...

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  3. eNovember 17, 2009 at 3:46 PM

    That last line got me as well...

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  4. RavynNovember 18, 2009 at 7:11 AM

    People should learn from that last line.

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  5. PattiKenSeptember 18, 2010 at 11:03 AM

    I'll make it unanimous.

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  6. anthonynorthJanuary 11, 2011 at 9:56 AM

    I agree, an excellent last line.

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  7. C Hummel Kornell a/k/a C Hummel WilsonJanuary 11, 2011 at 10:46 AM

    Strong writing, although it saddens me that innocence is taken and then destroyed. Well done!

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  8. JingleJanuary 11, 2011 at 10:51 AM

    the less said, the less I'm wrong...

    wow.
    love the sentiment and how you deliver it.

    love love your take. :)

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  9. Kristen HaskellJanuary 11, 2011 at 12:35 PM

    Oh how this resinates the feelings I have around my mother's recent passing.

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  10. lightverseJanuary 11, 2011 at 4:18 PM

    Nice! And I agree with the others as well as you on the last line, too.

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  11. Tess KincaidJanuary 11, 2011 at 4:43 PM

    That is a brilliant last line. Really beautiful.

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  12. Sioux RoslawskiJanuary 11, 2011 at 8:01 PM

    "...respiratory winds." Great image.

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  13. ZephyrInkJanuary 11, 2011 at 8:18 PM

    I really liked the “heard only with dying thoughts // and remembered with fading dreams” -- very well write poem. I'd applaud you, but the internet is in the way.

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  14. HelenJanuary 11, 2011 at 9:36 PM

    You combined simplicity with elegance and wrote a beautiful piece ...... 'the less I've said, the less I'm wrong' is profound.

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  15. ReflectionsJanuary 12, 2011 at 1:28 AM

    Powerful parting lines, combining the complex simplicity of words left to be remembered... You will be greatly missed.

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  16. JinksyJanuary 13, 2011 at 5:55 AM

    An orchestra tires of the song
    and the less I've said, the less I'm wrong

    Way to go!

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